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I’m like a puzzle,
All my different scars show you where I was broken
And then glued back together again.

I’m like a painting,
All the colors and textures up close look a mess and unfixed
But standing back they show you something beautiful and wonderful.

I’m like a tree,
Standing tall and strong against the wind and the rain
Giving shelter to those that need it from the hazardous conditions of life.

I’m like the river,
Flowing freely and full of breath
Never tied down, but always on my heart's true path.

I am one with myself,
I am beautiful,
I am strong,
And I am free.
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Delta-13 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have to say that I am absolutely in love with the last four stanzas. They are so powerful and they resonant long after the reader finishes reading. I think this is because you spend the rest of the moment building to that climatic moment at the end. I also love how you start off with your 'negatives' and 'weaknesses' and end with your strengths. This is a beautiful poem. Well done!
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh! Thank you for the amazing review! I'm really glad you liked the poem I sent in.
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Delta-13 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! It was a great poem. ^_^
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.


I am LOVING your use of metaphors- especially in the first three stanzas. The comparison of yourself to a puzzle, painting and tree are wonderfully done- both emotionally and visually stimulating.


If I have any constructive criticism it would be regarding the use of the word ‘life’ three times in the 3rd and 4th stanza. It felt a little forced to me. I found myself wishing you had opened up your vocabulary a bit and used something a tad more creative. 


Otherwise, this poem is solid- a great read- one that I very much enjoyed!  I hope this is helpful. Thank you and have a happy new year!

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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the critique. I really enjoy knowing what I can do to improve my writing ability.

I am going to go over the poem again and think about what I can do to improve upon it. I think that you are correct in thinking that it does seem a little forced. Thank you for your help! It is much appreciated.

Happy new year!
~Greenleaf
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kittylover345 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
this is so beautiful and well thought out! well done! i love it! :patonback: 
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! That means a lot to me.Hug 
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kittylover345 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
ur poem has so much meaning! u have a talent!
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Greenleaf1075 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I'm really glad you think so. I've been working hard on my writing skills as of late and I am glad that it is paying off. Thank you again!
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